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Monday, December 08, 2008

diary #2

old diary
the thoughts I tried
to cross out
[Third place, Sketchbook kukai, November 2008]


Blogger polona said...

the third line manes this one extraordinary... those pesky thoughts, eh...

1:21 PM  
Anonymous Ken said...

I agree about the third line.

"Cross out" adds a great tactile sensation to how we struggle with the past.


4:27 PM  
Blogger J. Andrew Lockhart said...

perfect! I have seen the same...

7:41 PM  
Blogger Devika said...

I like to cross out thoughts in the mind and then put it in the diary...

kidding my dear, mine is perhaps full of cross marks and overwritings...find it difficult to make out what was meant originally and yet some words remain untouched...

this is well put, Bill

why don't you keep off your old diaries, Bill -Get a new one for the New year :)


10:28 PM  
Blogger Bill said...

Yeah, polona,Ken, and Andrew, it's easier to cross out words than thoughts.

Devika, I have one more "old diary" to go (I submitted 3 to the kukai).

12:32 PM  
Blogger Masago said...

:-) If you use a word processor you can just use the BackSpace button. :-)

7:23 PM  
Blogger Crafty Green Poet said...

what I like (and recognise from my own experience) in this is that you've only tried to cross out the old thoughts, they're actually still there to read

11:39 PM  
Blogger jem said...

Wow. Simply stunning. I can relate to this one through the years. Top marks Bill!

3:54 AM  
Blogger haiku-shelf said...

very interesting!

1:58 PM  
Blogger Magyar said...

Bill, hits home... I guess we all 'rub out' a few things. What a grand invention, a diary with a delete key. _m

4:35 PM  
Blogger Devika said...

came for a new one Bill

hope all fine with you..


7:27 PM  
Blogger Bill said...

A word-processed diary, Vaughn? An abomination!Delete buttons are so final (but there's always the recycle bin).

And, Juliet, still there to think.

Jem, this one seems to strike a chord with a lot of people.

Thanks, Angelika.

Magyar, see what I said to Vaughn.

Devika, I usually post twice a week, at intervals of about 3 days. But drop in any time.

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