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Monday, November 10, 2008

first day

the first day
of the rest of my life
gloomy Sunday
(I'll explain later.)
This is the revision of one I posted at quotesqueen. You can visit that blog by clicking on "quotesqueen" to the left.


Blogger Masago said...

I await explanation. :-)

8:05 PM  
Blogger Art and Poetry said...

Me too!

2:02 AM  
Blogger Devika said...

I always go by notes :-)


2:52 AM  
Blogger Magyar said...

Most of my mornings are -foggy-.

3:30 AM  
Blogger gautami tripathy said...

It is..like that..at times...

3:44 AM  
Blogger Bill said...

Last line in the first version (which was not meant as a cry from the heart) was "morning fog." Then a friend of mine wrote a poem consisting of the juxtaposition of two allusions, juxtaposition being a fundamental formal principle of haiku and senryu. This gave me an idea. Since I already had one allusion, to a saying of obscure origin ("Today is the first day of the rest of your life.") that has been set to music, used as a movie title, etc., I decided to juxtapose it to another allusion derived from American popular culture: this time, to a classic Billie Holiday song. It was obviously the contrast in tone that I found interesting. Thus, a purely formal exercise.

But here's a more serious question. If the first day of the rest of your life turns out to be gloomy Sunday, how do you deal with it?

Vaughn, Nick, devika, magyar, and gautami, your comments are much appreciated. magyar and gautami, you seem to have caught much of the intention.

5:31 AM  
Blogger polona said...

well, every day can be the beginning of the rest of one's life so why not choose a sunny morning ;)
but some events are more remarkable than others and i see your intention here, bill (ouch)...

11:24 AM  
Blogger Bill said...

I have some choices, polona, about what I do with the hand I'm dealt, but I can't choose the hand.

7:05 PM  
Blogger Masago said...

We at least have a hand. :-)

As for "gloomy Sunday"... another five days till Saturday. :-)

6:16 PM  
Blogger Bill said...

Hold the thought, Vaughn.

7:27 PM  
Blogger jem said...

As soon as I read this I thought about what it meant that the first day is a gloomy day - and I think its apt as things can only get brighter from them. Its like a dawn of the rest of your life - it starts dark because it has to, so you can notice the forthcoming light.

8:15 AM  
Blogger Devika said...

Hi Bill,

I would say live the gloomy days, happily everafter..:-))

after all, these times we have a virtual world to vent out and have fun! ;-)

thank you for the explanation as well..


6:48 AM  
Blogger Pat Paulk said...

Doesn't sound good. Hope all is well.

5:58 AM  
Blogger Bill said...

jem and devika, thanks for those thoughful comments.

Things couldn't be better, Pat, and thanks for asking. As I said, this started as a kind of exercise. I posted it when I saw its possibilities as a provocation.

6:31 AM  
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