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A blog devoted mainly to haiku and senryu and to thoughts about, and inspired by, haiku and senryu.

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Thursday, January 25, 2007

rain at the window

your breath carried to me

on a whisper

Anonymous said...: WOW! Has this been published yet?; 8:09 PM
Bill said...: This gathered a grand total of 2 points in the latest kukai, aurora. I've changed the first line (improved it, I believe); "blizzard" was the required kigo in the kukai.; 8:21 PM
Anonymous said...: "rain" and "breath" mesh better together than "blizzard". You should submit the revised version somewhere.; 8:43 PM
floots said...: stunning bill
loved it; 11:59 PM
Pat Paulk said...: Wonderful!!; 8:30 AM
polona said...: lovely sensual image!
yes, rain in L1 works so much better for me than blizzard.; 12:30 PM
Bill said...: aurora, floots, pat, and polona, thanks. I never got the "blizzard" line right, in the original.; 7:11 PM
J. Andrew Lockhart said...: beautiful!; 9:54 PM
Bill said...: Thanks andrew and Vaughn.; 2:04 PM