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Tuesday, January 23, 2007

old professor

1
ORIGINAL
old professor
rearranging classroom chairs
into rows
2
REVISION
old professor
rearranging chairs
into rows
The "revision" is actually the original version. See eastern sparrow's comment and my response for clarification.

10 Comments:

Blogger Aurora said...

What's today's lesson plan? :)

9:47 AM  
Blogger Bill said...

Well, aurora, it's all about sharing, interacting, facilitating and so on. That's why only old professors think chairs should be arranged into rows.

10:34 AM  
Blogger Pat Paulk said...

Kind of tough to arrange bloggers in rows, but you do have our undivided attention--well, almost undivided.

5:01 AM  
Blogger Bill said...

Divided is all I could ask, pat.

8:14 AM  
Anonymous kara said...

Made me smile...

2:18 PM  
Blogger Bill said...

Glad to hear it, kara. Here's a smile back at you.

7:07 AM  
Blogger floots said...

can old teachers identify with old professors :)

12:01 AM  
Blogger easternsparrow said...

Another evocative haiku, Bill.
I think that the word(classroom) is redundant. Omitting it gives more ambiguity to this beautiful haiku and lets it resonate. I like the repetition of the(r)which immitates the sound of the chairs.

old professor
rearranging chairs
into rows

Rita

9:53 AM  
Blogger Bill said...

Thanks, floots and Rita. Actually, I've revised this is Rita suggests, since I posted it here. I'll now post the revised version, which is in fact how I originally wrote it. I inserted "classroom" because I thought readers might feel the need of some frame of reference.

7:15 PM  
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