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Saturday, February 18, 2012

the doctor wants

to take a closer look . . .

coffee gone cold

le docteur demande

à voir de plus près . . .

la café refroidi

First published at Tempslibre. French translation by Serge Tome

Monika said...: Poignant. I hope everything will be all right.; 10:52 AM
Bill said...: This is out of the past, Monika, and everything turned out fine. We were having coffee in a diner when Pat picked up the message (she was the patient), and, as we were talking over what it meant, our coffee went cold. The poem suggests, of course, that it's the message that's cooling the coffee.; 11:51 AM
polona said...: i love the touch of humour in a potentially very serious situation (glad it turned out fine); 5:59 AM
Danaelle said...: Un haïku astucieux. Félicitations !; 8:47 AM
Monika said...: Fine Bill, I'm happy this is past and over ! Just a little detail (I didn't see it earlier): the 3rd line should read

le café refroidi; 2:44 PM
Magyar said...: ... and of course, discussing the message, more important than the coffee.
Always. _m; 7:44 PM
Frank... said...: A bitter-sweet post. Bill. Glad to hear that all turned out well...; 7:13 AM
Bill said...: Polona, Daniele, Magyar, and Frank, your comments are appreciated.

And, Monika, thanks for the return visit and the correction.; 6:38 AM

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