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Sunday, February 05, 2012

kiss

midnight kiss
still making promises
to myself

Shiki Kukai January 2012; kigo: New Year's resolutions

19 Comments:

Blogger John McDonald said...

another goodie Bill
john

2:34 AM  
Blogger Frank... said...

Resolutions made and maybe broken. Nice one, Bill...

5:59 AM  
Blogger Bill said...

thanks, John and frank.

4:13 PM  
Blogger Magyar said...

That dreamy promise... well understood, Bill. _m

3:39 AM  
Blogger Monika said...

I like this one, Bill - but it isn't easy to translate in French. Okay, I'll give it a try :


baiser de minuit
je fais encore des promesses
à moi-même

or

baiser de minuit
je continue à faire des promesses
à moi-même

8:22 AM  
Blogger Bill said...

glad it reached you, doug.

thanks, Monika. I like your translations. In this case, I think I prefer the "je fais encore" version, partly because "encore" is a word of more than one meaning.

11:08 AM  
Blogger Adelaide said...

Don't we all? We feel we must keep promises made to others, but not to ourselves. Why is that?

Adelaide

6:23 AM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

midnight
still unresolved about
resolutions



much love...

11:00 AM  
Blogger mop said...

+

Midnight kiss,
no promess.

+

(smile)

3:07 AM  
Blogger Bill said...

Adelaide: Because no one will tell?

Nicely turned, gillena.

Thanks, Marcel

Morning after –
her name begins
with an L

8:23 AM  
Blogger Danièle Duteil said...

Yes ! never better served than by oneself.

2:21 PM  
Blogger Monika said...

lendemain matin -
son nom commence
par L

great, Bill !
You make me laugh !

12:11 PM  
Blogger Bill said...

thanks, daniele

glad I make you laugh, Monika, but where did you find this one? I wrote it, but I don't remember posting it, and certainly not here. I will now, though.

2:14 PM  
Blogger Monika said...

Dear Bill,

you made me doubt about myself... but... I found this very good senryû published as YOUR comment to Marcel !

cheers
M

2:17 PM  
Blogger Bill said...

Oh, right. well, I'm not getting any younger.

2:26 PM  
Blogger Monika said...

Never mind, Bill... (me neither...! ) ;-) By the way, we both know : getting older is the only way they found not to die young !

6:12 AM  
Blogger Danièle Duteil said...

"getting older is the only way they found not to die young !"
Très bon !

3:12 AM  
Blogger Tikkis said...

midnight moon
kissing
a lightened cloud


...enlightenment... how about:

midnight cloud
kissing
an enlightened moon

? :-)?

12:34 AM  
Blogger Bill said...

As they say, Monika and Daniele, consider the alternative.

Tikkis

kissing a cloud
as it passes . . .
moonlight

?

12:02 PM  

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