haiku-usa: fireflies

Wednesday, November 18, 2009

the children

all grown

[First published in Acorn]

Emma Dalloway said...: I dont think this is the intended meaning, but I see a couple enjoying a campfire and fireflies - finally able to enjoy a quiet camping trip now the kids have moved out...

my interpretation probably says more about my having 2 rambunctious boys under 5; 4:18 PM
Gillena Cox said...: yes, so true, those tiny little one who light up our lives will leave us to go out on their one; i'm an empty nester myself

much love
gillena; 5:55 PM
Magyar said...: __Seeing the fireflies, that instant's recall, the memories; grandchildren and the memories begin... again. _m; 7:31 AM
Bill said...: That's a perfectly valid reading, Dalloway. The poem is open on the point you raise.

And the melancholy an empty nester might feel (do I hear this in your comment) is also valid, Gillena.

And, Doug, that's the sort of thing I was going for.

It's common in my haiku for line 3 to take away what line 2 has given, and that's true of this one: the children are there in line 2, gone in line 3.; 11:52 AM
DickWhyte said...: Brilliant Bill - this one has an excellent sense of 'ma' between the two images. Just lovely.; 2:48 PM
Bill said...: Thanks so much, Dick.; 6:56 AM
Anonymous said...: I truly love this one how nicely put..; 5:25 AM
Bill said...: thanks for the visit, O Anonymous One; 7:30 PM

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