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Wednesday, November 18, 2009

fireflies

fireflies
the children
all grown

[First published in Acorn]

8 Comments:

Blogger Dalloway said...

I dont think this is the intended meaning, but I see a couple enjoying a campfire and fireflies - finally able to enjoy a quiet camping trip now the kids have moved out...

my interpretation probably says more about my having 2 rambunctious boys under 5

4:18 PM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

yes, so true, those tiny little one who light up our lives will leave us to go out on their one; i'm an empty nester myself

much love
gillena

5:55 PM  
Blogger Magyar said...

__Seeing the fireflies, that instant's recall, the memories; grandchildren and the memories begin... again. _m

7:31 AM  
Blogger Bill said...

That's a perfectly valid reading, Dalloway. The poem is open on the point you raise.

And the melancholy an empty nester might feel (do I hear this in your comment) is also valid, Gillena.

And, Doug, that's the sort of thing I was going for.

It's common in my haiku for line 3 to take away what line 2 has given, and that's true of this one: the children are there in line 2, gone in line 3.

11:52 AM  
Blogger DickWhyte said...

Brilliant Bill - this one has an excellent sense of 'ma' between the two images. Just lovely.

2:48 PM  
Blogger Bill said...

Thanks so much, Dick.

6:56 AM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

I truly love this one how nicely put..

5:25 AM  
Blogger Bill said...

thanks for the visit, O Anonymous One

7:30 PM  

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