haiku-usa

A blog devoted mainly to haiku and senryu and to thoughts about, and inspired by, haiku and senryu.

Haiku is to poetry as espresso is to coffee.

Monday, December 19, 2011

winter solstice

the teenagers make a vow

for now

(Jumping the gun by a few days, I know. In spite of the kigo, this feels more like senryu to me. Maybe it's haikyu or senryku.)

Monika said...: Hi Bill,

never mind if it's haiku or senryû - it's good ! (But to me, too, it looks like senryû.); 5:18 PM
John McDonald said...: nice one Bill
john; 12:33 AM
Magyar said...: How well put!
__Teenagers -a vow... for now.-

_m; 10:07 AM
Bill said...: thanks, Monika, John, and Doug.; 2:23 PM
Ramesh Sood said...: A vow for Now.. beautiful Bill if we all could do that.. yes.

And thanks for your feedback. will take care.. infact I tried in my next post a little purer juxtaposition.. have a look here Bill and would love to know if I show improvement..

http://rameshsood.blogspot.com/2011/12/stale-fruits-cold-dreams.html; 10:25 PM
HaikuKelly said...: I agree, who cares which category it technically falls into. If it speaks an element of truth, it works. Having worked with teens for years, I think this poem (whatever it is) works. Nicely done!; 1:10 PM