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Friday, June 05, 2009

weight

a bee's weight
on the petal
summer's end

Summer's end? Why, it's only beginning! But we're still learning, and we posted this for practice.

This time, photo and verse are both mine.

20 Comments:

Anonymous Gina said...

welcome to haiga ! they are both lovely Bill ... i particularly like the one with lights as it works on so many levels with open ended meaning.

lovely work >>> Gina

3:47 PM  
Blogger Masago said...

Nice

6:08 PM  
Blogger Bill said...

Thanks, Gina and Vaughn. Neither of these poems was written with haiga in mind. It was Pat's idea to match them up with the pictures. You'll probably be seeing some more conscious efforts in this direction in the future.

6:52 PM  
Blogger bandit said...

I like the idea of the 'bee's weight', comparative to the melancholy one might feel at summer's end, or one could imply the end of a certain era.

10:12 PM  
Blogger Devika said...

Lovely haiga, Bill :)

and I enjoyed your note....what I can't make out, is why change a fact for practice sake!! :)

hey, no -- I get the idea, I think :)

wishes,
devika

10:38 PM  
Blogger John McDonald said...

great image Bill(and Pat)
john

1:14 AM  
Blogger Frank Williams said...

A good collaboration - nice one Bill & Pat...

1:19 AM  
Blogger Bill said...

Both the picture and the poem date from the end of a previous summer, Devika. I posted it now ("out of season") because I'm trying to get the hang of composing and posting haiga--that's the practice I'm talking about.

I like your reading, Willie.

9:33 AM  
Blogger Devika said...

Okay, Bill :)

thanks,
devika

9:42 AM  
Blogger Bill said...

Thank you, John and Frank.

10:57 AM  
Blogger vina said...

Hi Bill, thanks a lot for the pointers!

8:59 PM  
Blogger Bill said...

My pleasure, Vina, and thanks for the visit.

10:38 AM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

lovely

7:18 PM  
Blogger Bill said...

Thank you, gillena.

7:36 PM  
Blogger Dalloway said...

this is a knockout haiku - I imagine as the petals are nearing their prime, even bees will begin to feel heavy

Im thrilled to see you trying your hand at haiga

11:26 PM  
Blogger Bill said...

Thanks, Dalloway. Haiku remains my first love, but haiga is kinda cute.

7:25 AM  
Blogger jem said...

I can read this slightly differently. It's like the bee is up the more summery end of the flower, getting the biggest dose of sun that it can.

I like the inclusion of haiga.

3:29 AM  
Blogger Bill said...

Very interesting reading, jem, and perfectly valid.

5:28 PM  
Blogger Tikkis said...

A good photo!
And a neat mannequin you caught!

3:05 AM  
Blogger Bill said...

Thanks, tikkis.

8:44 PM  

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