haiku-usa: splinter

Sunday, June 28, 2009

teasing out a splinter

from the sole of my foot–

the heat!

[This is a revised version of a haiku that appeared in the Shiki Monthly Kukai, Free Format division, for June 2009. The assigned topic: wood]

Magyar said...: ...the needle plunges just a little... too deep.

Words you can feel. Good one, Bill!
_m; 5:06 PM
Devika Jyothi said...: IT IS hot here,
but, words are more intense to me...I feel all the heat here, in this poem, Bill

very effective choice of words,

wishes,
devika; 8:43 PM
Frank... said...: Nice haiku Bill...; 6:35 AM
Tikkis said...: barefoot poet --
not lost
his pen; 11:43 AM
Devika Jyothi said...: Now there's a something to share Bill

yesterday when I commented I was feeling all heat there...and today as Dalloway comments 'fun' I feel like laughing,

there's another reason -- monsoon has started and slow thunder is rolling across the skies...more rains today :)

devika; 4:40 AM
Bill said...: Doug. Devika, Frank, Tikkis, Dalloway, Thanks.; 5:00 AM
jem said...: I like the thought of splinters, if not their actual presence. They seem to show a greater connection between us and the things we touch.; 4:39 AM
Bill said...: That's an interesting thought, jem.; 4:05 PM

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