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A blog devoted mainly to haiku and senryu and to thoughts about, and inspired by, haiku and senryu.

Haiku is to poetry as espresso is to coffee.

Thursday, June 28, 2012

my grandchild's hand . . .

how long will he remember

this rainbow

A slightly different version was posted at the International Haiku Kukai.

Danaelle said...: I like it, Bill !; 11:58 AM
John McDonald said...: delightful Bill
john; 3:07 PM
bouwebrouwer said...: Lovely!; 3:28 AM
Frank... said...: A lovely image, Bill...; 5:52 AM
Kristin Riggs said...: Beautiful...probably forever. :)

-Kristin; 10:23 PM
Gillena Cox said...: nice one

much love...; 8:47 AM
Bill said...: Thanks, my friends.; 6:29 PM
Rita Odeh said...: L2 and L3 are stunning. I think that L1 needs revision. May I suggest:

double rainbow-
how long will my grandchild
remember it

Your contribution to the International Kukai is always significant.; 10:02 PM
Bill said...: Good suggestion, Rita. Thanks. It loses the sense of a shared moment, which is really what the ku is about (Will he remember moments shared with me? Will he remember me?), but I'm not sure my version gets that, either.; 6:50 AM