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Thursday, June 28, 2012

hand

my grandchild's hand . . .
how long will he remember
this rainbow

A slightly different version was posted at the International Haiku Kukai.

9 Comments:

Blogger Danièle Duteil said...

I like it, Bill !

11:58 AM  
Blogger John McDonald said...

delightful Bill
john

3:07 PM  
Blogger Bouwe Brouwer said...

Lovely!

3:28 AM  
Blogger Frank... said...

A lovely image, Bill...

5:52 AM  
Blogger Kristin Riggs said...

Beautiful...probably forever. :)

-Kristin

10:23 PM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

nice one

much love...

8:47 AM  
Blogger Bill said...

Thanks, my friends.

6:29 PM  
Blogger Rita Odeh said...

L2 and L3 are stunning. I think that L1 needs revision. May I suggest:


double rainbow-
how long will my grandchild
remember it

Your contribution to the International Kukai is always significant.

10:02 PM  
Blogger Bill said...

Good suggestion, Rita. Thanks. It loses the sense of a shared moment, which is really what the ku is about (Will he remember moments shared with me? Will he remember me?), but I'm not sure my version gets that, either.

6:50 AM  

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