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Wednesday, October 05, 2011

rain

rain on the windshield
the old quarrel
back and forth

First place, Shiki Kukai, free format, September 2011; Keyword "rain"

There's a copying error above. The text as it appeared in the kukai:

rain on the windshield
the old argument
back and forth

I'm leaving both versions up, since the earlier posting has already received comments.

A quarrel is an argument, but an argument is not necessarily a quarrel.


14 Comments:

Blogger Magyar said...

__The give and take, that push and pull... that changing of positions; the driver votes.
__Like it! _m

7:46 AM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

nice one Bill

much love...

8:59 AM  
Blogger Juhani Tikkanen said...

Really nice, those both ...

windshield
arguing
with a passenger


;-)

1:00 AM  
Blogger Bill said...

Thanks, Doug, Gillena, and tikkis.

That's a nicely ambiguous one, tikkis. I try to make a point of not arguing with windshields.

7:28 AM  
Blogger Kristin Riggs said...

Both versions are terrific, Bill!!!

10:54 PM  
Blogger Bill said...

Thank you, Kristin.

9:59 PM  
Blogger John McDonald said...

congrats Bill well done
john

12:23 AM  
Blogger Bill said...

Thanks, John.

8:14 PM  
Blogger Crafty Green Poet said...

excellent juxtaposition and yes there's definitely such a difference between argument and quarrel

11:34 AM  
Blogger Bill said...

Thanks, Juliet.

3:29 PM  
Blogger jem said...

Wow. So many layers in this - it can take me to so many places. But firstly it reminded me of childhood, holidays, always raining, driving, getting lost, parents strained patience.

3:59 AM  
Blogger Bill said...

Yes, Jem, all those memories went into this ku; I'm delighted you found them there.

10:09 AM  
Blogger kami haiku gmail said...

Brilliant, both versions.

kami

9:39 AM  
Blogger Bill said...

Thank you, Kami.

6:34 PM  

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