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Wednesday, October 05, 2011
rain on the windshield
the old quarrel
back and forth
First place, Shiki Kukai, free format, September 2011; Keyword "rain"
There's a copying error above. The text as it appeared in the kukai:
rain on the windshield
the old argument
back and forth
I'm leaving both versions up, since the earlier posting has already received comments.
A quarrel is an argument, but an argument is not necessarily a quarrel.
14 Comments:
__The give and take, that push and pull... that changing of positions; the driver votes.
__Like it! _m
nice one Bill
much love...
Really nice, those both ...
windshield
arguing
with a passenger
;-)
Thanks, Doug, Gillena, and tikkis.
That's a nicely ambiguous one, tikkis. I try to make a point of not arguing with windshields.
Both versions are terrific, Bill!!!
Thank you, Kristin.
congrats Bill well done
john
Thanks, John.
excellent juxtaposition and yes there's definitely such a difference between argument and quarrel
Thanks, Juliet.
Wow. So many layers in this - it can take me to so many places. But firstly it reminded me of childhood, holidays, always raining, driving, getting lost, parents strained patience.
Yes, Jem, all those memories went into this ku; I'm delighted you found them there.
Brilliant, both versions.
kami
Thank you, Kami.
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