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A blog devoted mainly to haiku and senryu and to thoughts about, and inspired by, haiku and senryu.
Tuesday, November 09, 2010
after a good bath
struck by the radiance
of the rising moon
striding through fallen leaves
it feels so good
to shit in the field
Santoka (1882-1940)
Santoka didn't write these as companion pieces, but I think they make a nice pair. The two together give you a clearer sense of his personality (of his Zen, if you will) than either would standing alone.
For an explanation of "afters," see the post for November 2, 2010.
8 Comments:
ha! what combination to show the personae, Bill-- there's something about real zen -- it takes guts as well to present in poetry :)
wishes,
devika
i was wondering if you had given up on your 'after' series
much love
gillena
Yes. Santoka is one of my favorit haikuist; these I do not remember, so perhaps new for me. Thanks for those!
struck by the
fallen leaves --
harvest time!
I agree fit well together
john
good
good
Thanks for the comments.
Tikkis, what about
struck
by a falling leaf––
harvest time
Gillena, this series will continue, alternating with originals of my own.
Enjoyed!
Bill: Yes. Much more better!
Thanks!
In my Finnish version I used a slightly diluted version:
"occurred to me".
But perhaps I'll write one more version later.
As it's best, writing in blogs with comments is a good laboratory.
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