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Sunday, February 17, 2008

look familiar?

this is just to say
the plums in the icebox
are for breakfast
(Shiki Kukai, January 2008)


Blogger polona said...

an ordinary situation represented in a less than ordinary manner

9:32 AM  
Blogger josh said...

this is just to say
i'm glad you have the moxie
to utilize parody in the kukai

10:14 AM  
Blogger haiku-shelf said...

i too like WCW

best wishes,

1:24 PM  
Blogger haiku-shelf said...

i found his voice (WHC)!


1:33 PM  
Blogger haiku-shelf said...

i suppose the link was too long...

but you`ll find it here

1:36 PM  
Blogger floots said...

man i could eat a red wheelbarrow full of plums :)

1:34 AM  
Blogger haiku-shelf said...

and afterwards...

2:01 AM  
Blogger Bill said...

this is just to say

I have eaten
the plums
that were in
the icebox

and which
you were probably
for breakfast

Forgive me
they were delicious
so sweet
and so cold

--William Carlos Wiliams

For anyone familiar with this poem, the parody aspect of mine is clear. If Mrs. Williams had left this note, we probably would never have had her husband's poem.

If I understand your comment, polona, my poem may work even if you don't know the Wiliams poem.

Yeah, Josh, I know I was being naughty. The poem scored higher than I'd expected.

Thanks for the link, Angelika, and for your comment.

And, floots, before you eat that wheelbarrow full of plums, think of Angelika's warning.

7:28 AM  
Blogger Inside our hands, outside our hearts said...

Bill, I learn something from each of your writings. I thank you for that.


3:59 PM  
OpenID quotesqueen said...

The WCW poem was one of the first poems I learned to love in my youth! And I adore the red wheelbarrow...thanks for the reminder.

4:52 PM  
Blogger Bill said...

Thanks, T and QQ. Many haiku poets acknowledge a debt to Williams.

7:13 PM  
Blogger J. Andrew Lockhart said...

I like it :)

7:36 PM  
Blogger Bill said...

What it's all about, andrew. Thanks.

9:17 AM  
Blogger Crafty Green Poet said...

this is excellent,

2:37 AM  
Blogger Bill said...

Thanks, Juliet.

6:18 AM  
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5:54 AM  
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6:26 AM  

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