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Wednesday, August 01, 2007


flea collar
the dog's bark
looks bigger
Entry in the Shiki monthly kukai for July, 2007. Kigo: "flea"


Anonymous aurora said...

Ha! Excellent, Bill. :)

4:42 PM  
Blogger Masago said...

Ha! Indeed!
Welcome back.

7:55 PM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

flea collar
the dog's bark
looks louder

In my view, the original version has a more suggestive nuance as acoustic effect. It was one of my favourites: a subtle connection between the cause and the result.
Thank you, Bill.

12:12 AM  
Blogger Bill said...

Thnks for the comments, guys, and for your good wishes while I was away.

"bigger" was a copying error. I agree, dana-maria, that "louder" is stronger and more precise. I'll post that version and let visitors decide which they prefer.

6:59 AM  
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