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Tuesday, August 14, 2007

eye

eye for an eye—
nothing left
to cry with
[This is borderline senryu, since it clearly overlaps with epigram.]

8 Comments:

Anonymous aurora said...

Good one. I could see this being part of a haibun, too.

8:56 PM  
Blogger floots said...

it works and i like it
(i couldn't sleep and it is too early for form - maybe i have just invented the insomniru)
love these recent pieces - especially "high beams"
cheers bill

10:31 PM  
Blogger Bill said...

Thanks, aurora. I'll give the haibun idea some thought.

floots, delighted you're back in action. Hope you had a good break.

7:44 AM  
Blogger josh said...

I'm liking the brevity of your recent stuff Bill. "eye" is an powerful fragment with tons of potential. I think your phrase would resonate more with me if it was, perhaps, more subtle or ambiguous?

I've been lurking as a reader of your blog for @ month now. I hope it's okay to chime in now and again.

Here's a similar one (epigram - thanks for the new word) I wrote last year:

tank top
no place to wear
his heart

Cheers,

Josh

8:12 AM  
Blogger Bill said...

Welcome aboard, Josh, and thanks for the comment.

5:29 PM  
Blogger Pat Paulk said...

Revenge is a battery acid best left out of sight. Excellent piece!!

6:59 AM  
Blogger Bill said...

Thanks, Pat. Good comment.

9:23 AM  
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