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Monday, November 13, 2006

abandoned

abandoned . . .
moonlight
on broken glass

15 Comments:

Blogger Aurora said...

Bill, this says so much. Perfect!

10:03 AM  
Blogger polona said...

wonderful!

11:51 AM  
Blogger Bill said...

Thanks, aurora and polona. I wasn't sure it said enough.

7:23 PM  
Blogger Masago said...

A subtle word sketch...Interesting.

8:29 PM  
Blogger J. Andrew Lockhart said...

lonely and stark -- beautiful

11:27 PM  
Blogger Bill said...

Thanks, vaughn and andrew. As my response to aurora and polona suggests, I was afraid it might be too subtle, too stark. I'm glad it works for you.

3:42 PM  
Blogger Melanie Alberts said...

It's not too stark..."abandoned" is such a weighty word, combined with the image of moonlight on broken glass...it's at once romantic and skin crawling. Very cool.

5:19 PM  
Blogger Bill said...

Thanks, Melanie. I appreciate the care you take in articulating your response. And it's always good to hear from you.

5:47 PM  
Blogger Judy Kamilhor said...

Bill,

This one really grabbed me.

kami

11:16 AM  
Blogger Bill said...

Thanks, kami. Glad to hear it.

2:33 PM  
Blogger . Gabi Greve said...

very impressive, Bill san !

Gabi
. Happy Haiku Gallery .

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12:10 AM  
Blogger Tikkis said...

Just some five words,
and so strong story!

What happened? No lights anymore,
just moonlight left. Why broken glass. Yeah. If I got some good idea in the middle of the night,
I'll phone you!

10:26 AM  
Blogger Bill said...

Thank you, gabi.

tikkis, I like to give you something to do.

8:52 PM  
Blogger Tikkis said...

Yeah, Bill, that's the idea of writing haikus!

11:08 PM  
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