haiku-usa: afterglow

Saturday, April 22, 2006

afterglow . . .

in the soft light she looks

like his ex-wife

floots said...: wonderful
this has so many echoes
i feel like a bat at a convention
i'm with tim s on this one; 12:27 AM
Anonymous Poet said...: Yes. A mixed impression. Indeed.; 7:29 AM
Bill said...: Thanks for your comments, tim, floots, and anon. You know, since I've never had an ex-wife, I don't know if this would be good news or bad news. I suspect that, were I the guy, I'd find it sensual and disturbing, making me feel like a bat trying to deal with a multitude of echoes, producing a mixed impression indeed. I think we're all on the same page here. I hope I get some responses from women.; 9:52 AM
polona said...: i love the haiku and it evokes mixed feelings for me, too.; 1:28 PM
J. Andrew Lockhart said...: Brilliant!; 2:40 PM
Mike Rehling said...: There may be more truth here than in the volume you refer to... ;-); 3:29 PM
Bill said...: polona, andrew, and michael, your comments are deeply appreciated.; 8:17 PM
Natalia L. Rudychev said...: This piece creates the aura of ambiguity, subtle overtones and multiple echoes. I enjoyed it.; 3:18 AM
Masago said...: Congrats on winning the April Kukai (first place Kigo winner)!; 6:57 PM
Bill said...: Thanks for your thoughtful commetn, Natalia.

And Vaughn, my friend, thanks for your message.; 8:02 AM

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