haiku-usa: reading the paper

Saturday, May 07, 2005

she reads one paper

he reads another

together

floots said...: It good to see these "moments" getting some air time. Passion, lust and loss tend to be the leaders when it comes to poetry but these quietly intimate times are to be treasured and the brevity of the form means it can be done without become cloying.
(That's a long-winded way of saying I liked it!); 3:14 AM
Bill said...: Floots: Thanks for being "long-winded." It helps a great deal to know just what a reader is responding to, whether positively or negatively, and you have a habit of making words count.; 5:56 AM
Michael said...: it's good short poetry, but I just don't know if it really qualifies as haiku. the haiku should go from the specific in the first two lines to the universal in the last line...

but I like short poetry of any sort, and you've some good things here...; 9:40 AM
Bill said...: Myrrander: Good point. I guess I think that "together" opens out to the universal. There's also a case for regarding this as just on the other side of the blurred boundary that doesn't really separate haiku from senryu. Of course, as you suggest, unless we're in a follow-the-rules-or-else context, it can work as a short poem even if it's not haiku. Thanks for your comment.; 10:25 AM
Anonymous Poet said...: I wish I had someone to read the paper with!

I think the key word here is "together." It brings a sense of unity to what would otherwise be an ordinary activity.; 6:39 AM

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