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Saturday, March 11, 2006

unbuttoned

first robin
my overcoat
unbuttoned

11 Comments:

Blogger floots said...

spring and robins
robins and spring
they've had an effect on us both
(my current effort is a robin tanka - of sorts)
i still cannot capture the economy of words achieved by a truekuer (it seemed like a good term until i saw it written down :) ) such as yourself
nice one
cheers

12:01 AM  
Blogger Nick Zegarac said...

Spring haiku - renewing life to its fullest with only the most sparce reflections. Excellent!

10:05 AM  
Blogger Aurora said...

I really like this one, although for some reason I keep reading it as "my unbuttoned overcoat".

12:19 PM  
Blogger polona said...

this one gives me the spring feel i crave

2:08 PM  
Blogger Bill said...

Thank you, floots, nick, aurora, and polona. truekuer, floots? hmmmm. Well, that's the gist of it, aurora. nick and polona: the forecast calls for cold weather later this week: I guess I won't put my overcoat in storage just yet.

I want to mention that this one benefitted from helpful comments offered by my friends at aha!poetry forum.

3:53 PM  
Blogger J. Andrew Lockhart said...

slowly warming up!!

7:42 PM  
Blogger Shane said...

nicely done

10:37 PM  
Blogger Bill said...

Thanks, andrew and shane.

7:38 AM  
Blogger Eric said...

if the robins were here they'd need to keep their overcoats buttoned !! with wind chill, temperatures in the single digits this week.

9:42 AM  
Blogger Bill said...

Changeable weather is part of what it's about. Unbutton your overcoat, but don't put it away.

an earlier ku:

snowflakes
the robin's flight
from tree to tree

7:27 PM  
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7:19 AM  

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