haiku-usa: unbuttoned

Saturday, March 11, 2006

first robin

my overcoat

unbuttoned

floots said...: spring and robins
robins and spring
they've had an effect on us both
(my current effort is a robin tanka - of sorts)
i still cannot capture the economy of words achieved by a truekuer (it seemed like a good term until i saw it written down :) ) such as yourself
nice one
cheers; 12:01 AM
Nick Zegarac said...: Spring haiku - renewing life to its fullest with only the most sparce reflections. Excellent!; 10:05 AM
polona said...: this one gives me the spring feel i crave; 2:08 PM
Bill said...: Thank you, floots, nick, aurora, and polona. truekuer, floots? hmmmm. Well, that's the gist of it, aurora. nick and polona: the forecast calls for cold weather later this week: I guess I won't put my overcoat in storage just yet.

I want to mention that this one benefitted from helpful comments offered by my friends at aha!poetry forum.; 3:53 PM
J. Andrew Lockhart said...: slowly warming up!!; 7:42 PM
Unique Designs from Zazzle said...: nicely done; 10:37 PM
Bill said...: Thanks, andrew and shane.; 7:38 AM
eric l houck jr said...: if the robins were here they'd need to keep their overcoats buttoned !! with wind chill, temperatures in the single digits this week.; 9:42 AM
Bill said...: Changeable weather is part of what it's about. Unbutton your overcoat, but don't put it away.

an earlier ku:

snowflakes
the robin's flight
from tree to tree; 7:27 PM

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