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Tuesday, November 09, 2010

after: 2

after a good bath
struck by the radiance
of the rising moon

striding through fallen leaves
it feels so good
to shit in the field

Santoka (1882-1940)

Santoka didn't write these as companion pieces, but I think they make a nice pair. The two together give you a clearer sense of his personality (of his Zen, if you will) than either would standing alone.

For an explanation of "afters," see the post for November 2, 2010.


Blogger Devika Jyothi said...

ha! what combination to show the personae, Bill-- there's something about real zen -- it takes guts as well to present in poetry :)


6:47 AM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

i was wondering if you had given up on your 'after' series

much love

10:04 AM  
Blogger Tikkis said...

Yes. Santoka is one of my favorit haikuist; these I do not remember, so perhaps new for me. Thanks for those!

struck by the
fallen leaves --
harvest time!

11:02 PM  
Blogger John McDonald said...

I agree fit well together

12:32 AM  
Blogger Henrique Pimenta said...


5:20 AM  
Blogger Bill said...

Thanks for the comments.

Tikkis, what about

by a falling leaf––
harvest time

Gillena, this series will continue, alternating with originals of my own.

7:43 AM  
Blogger Masago said...


2:59 PM  
Blogger Juhani Tikkanen said...

Bill: Yes. Much more better!
In my Finnish version I used a slightly diluted version:
"occurred to me".
But perhaps I'll write one more version later.

As it's best, writing in blogs with comments is a good laboratory.

2:30 AM  

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